第一章:
It is no secret that Fenthick and I are lovers. Our feelings for each other are only matched by our devotion to Tyr and our loyalty to Neverwinter.
误:我们彼此之间的感觉只因我俩都献身于泰尔,且都效忠于无冬城。
修正:只有我们对提尔和无冬城的忠诚才能与我们彼此间的感情相提并论。
这个…不知是不是为了迁就HoTU[s:3]
第四章:牢房
Should Neverwinter survive, he may chose another sentence for me. I may yet be given a chance to make some small amends for what I have done. There is yet hope for me... and for us.
误:他要保住无冬城,也许就会另选一种刑罚给我…
修正:如果无冬城幸存下来,他就可能会选择另一种判决…
这里的should应该做if讲。